Thursday, 12 June 2008

Brighter




They had been waiting for hours, waiting for the rain to stop. The hotel room felt damp and miserable, outside it was no better. The unpaved streets of the little town had turned into a swamp of mud, big puddles speckled the empty street corners.

There was nothing more to say. All had already been shouted in the air during the long days and nights of their pitiful visit, their sad attempt to remake their relationship by taking a vacation. They felt empty inside, fatigue and bored. There was no more need for hatred and even bitterness felt a waste of strength.

The need to make the other understand had lost its meaning. The desperate urge to justify the decisions they had been making, seemed now pathetic and ludicrous.

They just wanted the rain to stop. They fantasized about leaving the hotel room, stepping outside, going separate ways, never looking back.

If it only would get brighter.


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The weekly theme for Thursday Challenge is bright


13 comments:

Zoey said...

Nice catch, you can see the sunbeams thats fighting to show themselves!

SusuPetal said...

And the sunbeams won the fight, finally, Zoey!

hpy said...

I like your story, and the photo too.

Picturing of Life said...

I love ur bright sky...

My Thursday Challenge post in here and here

SusuPetal said...

Thanks, HPY.

Bright sky after clouds is good, picturing of life.

Mick said...

A sad story, Susu ... but, a beautiful photograph.

SusuPetal said...

Mutual understanding though, Mick, maybe not so sad...?

ScaughtFive said...

"To have what you wanted
to be free but haunted
always running the gauntlet
in the dead of the night."

funny how a vacation can turn out to be the end of the whole deal. A familiar story.

SusuPetal said...

People seem to believe that you can travel away from yourself and your problems, that a change of scenery makes everything ok, that moving to a new house starts a new life.

People are so ready to believe.

ScaughtFive said...

"people are so ready to believe"

That's one of the things that makes me hide from them.

SusuPetal said...

Hmm, they don't stop existing though...

Peter said...

Once again a sad, but beatifully told, story!

You should perhaps try a happy story now; your favourite season is here!

SusuPetal said...

Peter, I just can't write happy stories, I'm handicapped that way.
But, occasionally I post happy photos, don't I!!!!